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Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« on: April 16, 2007, 04:38:20 am »
Strip

Is there is a more appropriate title?  Too many things in the book to single out one.
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #1 on: April 16, 2007, 04:41:48 am »
My choice for title would be "nice, not my type"... but I'm weird, we've established this.

Man, what a quality twist on the Mad Libs riff from small times.

A+++ strip, fast delivery, expert packaging, would read again.
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #2 on: April 16, 2007, 04:44:31 am »
I'd have put "depression played across his handsome features".

It was a good strip.  "nothing to write home about" chest . . . heh.
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #3 on: April 16, 2007, 04:47:39 am »
so good. So good.

I wrote a thank-you note like this to my friend.

it was pretty awesome.
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #4 on: April 16, 2007, 05:29:54 am »
Cats have lips?  Maybe that's why Ray hadn't noticed them.
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #5 on: April 16, 2007, 05:35:28 am »
Quote from: jaydub on April 16, 2007, 05:29:54 am
Cats have lips?  Maybe that's why Ray hadn't noticed them.

The only time I've noticed my cats' lips is when they look up at me and their pouty lower kittylip is visible. It gives me a cute-attack every time.
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #6 on: April 16, 2007, 06:10:48 am »
I would have gone for "depression played across his handsome features" as well.

All in all though, seems like we've been here before.

Just to add to the "Ray has latent tendencies" meme: Notice Ray had no problem writing an entire gay romance novel for Pat, but had to farm out the hetero gig.
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #7 on: April 16, 2007, 06:46:12 am »
"Raunchy little tamale" is also pretty great.
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #8 on: April 16, 2007, 08:51:36 am »
Quote from: Charles Nelson Mandela on April 16, 2007, 06:10:48 am
Just to add to the "Ray has latent tendencies" meme: Notice Ray had no problem writing an entire gay romance novel for Pat, but had to farm out the hetero gig.

I would imagine this is more for Beef's sake, not wanting him to think he'd been considering his lady in inappropriate ways (cf "Nice, not  my type").
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #9 on: April 16, 2007, 09:04:23 am »
Quote from: jaydub on April 16, 2007, 05:29:54 am
Cats have lips?  Maybe that's why Ray hadn't noticed them.

Dogs don't have lips, only mouth edges.  As a result, dogs can't drink from straws.  Cats can drink from straws, therefore cats have lips. 
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #10 on: April 16, 2007, 11:48:00 am »
Haha, this is class. Even something as small as imagining Ray's finished submission form including phrases such as "The (insert location) my pool house" is a chuckle.
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #11 on: April 17, 2007, 12:05:52 am »
What I love is the bluntness that Ray imparts on this little form. "Nice, not my type". He's clearly oblivious to eroticism, as evidence by:

http://achewood.com/index.php?date=01022007
http://achewood.com/index.php?date=07292002

Basically, the most eloquent eroticism Ray can come up with is "BONE!" Or "Happy Birthday."

What is with the sudden fascination with romance novels? Is he jealous of Cornelius?
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #12 on: April 17, 2007, 01:00:30 am »
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What is with the sudden fascination with romance novels? Is he jealous of Cornelius?

http://achewood.com/index.php?date=04272004
« Last Edit: April 17, 2007, 01:15:52 am by theauthors »
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #13 on: April 17, 2007, 01:19:17 am »
Quote from: theauthors on April 17, 2007, 01:00:30 am
http://achewood.com/index.php?date=04272004

THAT'S A GOOD ONE.

Seeing that in retrospect, it's kind of weird to think of Ray not talking about anything he does.
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Re: Apr.16.2007 - Chapter One.
« Reply #14 on: April 17, 2007, 05:05:44 am »
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